יום ראשון, 1 בפברואר 2015

the double rhyme

i heard a song today with unique talent
they succeeded in a double rhyme
and I will practice a mimic
the double rhyme is: aaaa+b cccc+b
since i am practice i plan a couplet aa+b cc+b hoping it would be simpler until my skill improves
[update third line- this is hard and complex- greater skill! 
i need aa bb+c and dd ee+c] 
title: women like bald men better anyway
by ts
:
life has treated me unfair
I am bald my head is bare
a hair-implant makes me scared
i wish i had more hair+ friend

I'm nervous but I'll risk it
as I munch my last biscuit
I distract myself with rhymes
save money 'til my dimes+ end!

what do you all think of my attempt? at least i tried!




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